老兵牛洪10多岁女儿的英文作文My hero《我的英雄》

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  老兵牛洪10多岁女儿的英文作文My hero《我的英雄》
  【一天女儿问我:“我的英语作文的题目是《My hero(我的英雄)》,我的同学们写的英雄都是‘钢铁侠’、‘变形金刚’等动画片中的人物,您猜猜我写的是谁?”因为近几天女儿好像和我有点青春期的逆反心理的较劲儿,我想肯定不是我,我就猜到:“是你爷爷?还是你妈?……”最终女儿说:“都不对!我写的是您!而且是《my super hero father(我的超级英雄老爸)》”】【在小孩子眼里爸爸能为她做好吃的、能陪她玩儿就是她心中的超级英雄老爸。】
  (女儿原文)
  He has black hair.a round face.two big eyes.and whenever a mouth will smile.
  He is my father.
  When I was young,I always like to cry,He was singing to me.I realy don’t cry.It’been amazing.I often sit on his neck,hold his large harsh hand.
  Then I go to school.When I have any problem,he always serious for my thinking.whatever he is doing.Also,he taught me the truth is life.
  He cook delicious,he is very good at cooking.Home from school every day,I can get good food to eat,In my opinion,this is very happy thing.
  Now he has white hair,Is time make him old?I don’t know.But no matter what time,he is my super hero.
  I love you,my super hero.
  中文翻译:《我的英雄》
  他有着黑头发(牛洪补充:显得很干练的浓密黑色小平头(以下括号里全为牛洪补充,特殊标明的除外。)),一张圆圆的脸(让人一看见就感觉很亲切温暖的圆圆的脸),两只大眼睛(一双炯炯有神、深邃、明亮等的大眼睛,你选,也可自己再创新),(牛洪评论:这段没完全写出爸爸的形象的真实具体鲜明的特点来,描写一个人物的形象、性格等特点时最关键的是真实准确地把他独有的特点写出来。括号里爸爸仅仅是抛砖引玉写了几个形容词,你自己想怎么写就怎么写。)什么时候他的嘴都在微笑(牛洪评论:这句抓住了爸爸最重要特点之一,但还分量不够,爸爸的微笑是女儿说的“售货员式的(迷人温暖的)的微笑”)。
  她就是我父亲。(是一名老兵。)
  在我很小的时候,我总是(有时)喜欢哭,他一给我唱歌,我(马上)就不哭了。这是很神奇的事。我还常常坐在他的脖子上,抓着他粗燥的大手。
  后来我上学了。我有任何问题,他总是非常重视我的想法,他无论在干什么事,(他都会马上停下来,)他总是认真为我思考,然后告诉我生活的真谛。
  他的厨艺很好,他非常擅长厨艺(牛洪评论:有点啰嗦)。每天从学校回到家,我都能吃到美味的食物,在我的记忆里,这是非常快乐的事情。
  (而且作为一名老兵,他还是一个非常勇敢的人,他曾经一人抓获三个持枪歹徒;他还能说能写能文能武,获得过冲锋枪比武第一,已经出版了两部书和发表了许多文章并多次获奖,讲课不到一小时赢得十几次雷鸣般的掌声,学员欢呼着迎进(送出)礼堂(有视频为证)。)
  现在他有白头发了,岁月使他变老了吗?我不知道。但是无论何时,他是我的超级英雄。
  我爱你,我的超级英雄。
  (牛洪评论:作文和文章都要有升华,作文是由一个或几个正能量事件的叙述后(作文不能写社会的阴暗面的所谓的负能量的事件),升华议论得出一个正能量激励人奋发向上的道理,才能多得些分。虽然我也知道对于还年少的你来说,你自己写的部分对于你来说是最重要的最需要老爸做的事,也是你最真实的最真切的感受,但却很可能为应试教育的作文考试的僵化评分标准所不容得低分。爸爸曾经读过好几篇据说是高考的0分作文,但爸爸却认为这几篇0分作文从忧患意识、对社会现实问题客观认知和逻辑严密的推理分析论证、文笔等都极为出色,爸爸看了后甚至深受感动感染,从这些作者的这一篇0分作文看甚至就可能看出他们都极可能是经世之才,可就是因为写的内容是暴露了社会存在的问题的阴暗面,被僵化的应试作文评分标准判定为是对社会不满的所谓负能量文章,因此被判为0分!都是人才呀!扼腕痛惜!反之,爸爸也看过好多篇高考满分作文,大部分除了文笔很流畅外,真实性、思想性、操作性等文章最重要的灵魂的东西基本上都很差,可就是不能让我感到共鸣的真正正能量,文章看上去都似乎无比正确可就是无用无效。我个人认为多篇高考满分作文基本上都和我看过的几篇高考0分作文的水平没法比。虽然爸爸写文章的水平还可以,但是你考试写作文要按照考试的要求、判分的标准要求、老师教的方法等写。曾经有一个故事不知是真是假,一个大作家的儿子在学校的作文不及格,大作家信心满满地给儿子代写了一篇作文让儿子第二天交给老师。结果儿子的这篇作家爸爸代写的作文却得了零分。)
  爸爸用谷歌翻译:
  He has black hair(He looked very capable of thick black crew cut), A round face(He has a round face that looks very warm and friendly), Two big eyes(A pair of piercing、Deep、Light Etc. big eyes), When his mouth is always smiling。
  He is my father.(He is an old soldier.)
  when I was young, I always (sometimes) like to cry, He was singing to me,I don’t cry at once. This is a very miraculous thing. I often sit on his neck, hold his big rough hands.
  Then I go to school. When I have any problem, whatever he is doing.(He will immediately stop, )he always serious for my thinking,taught me the truth of life.
  He cook delicious,he is very good at cooking.when I go back home from school every day. I can get good food to eat, in my memory, is very happy thing.
  【And as an old soldier. He is a very brave man. He had a man arrested three Scoundrel with gun. He can say and write,can write and valiant yet. He won the first contest submachine gun. He has published two books and Published many articles and numerous awards.Less than an hour lecture,He won a dozen times thunderous applause.The soldiers cheered and welcomed him into (Send out) the hall(With video prove).】
  Now he has white hair. Years made him aged yet? I don’t know. But no matter what time. he is my super hero.
  I love you,my super hero.

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