诚恳的学英语之二,写作问题

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  Many people consider the death penalty to be an appropriate punishment in certain cases, whilst others think that there is never a reason for it to be used.
  
  What is your opinion on the issue? Give reasons for your answer.
  
  这是作文的题目,下面是范文,我翻译了一下,请各位看下有问题吗?欢迎指正:)
  
  The issue of the death penalty is an emotional one, with many people taking the attitude that is needs to be used both often and swiftly in order to deter crime and ‘give criminals what they deserve’. Others believe that in a modern, so-called ‘civilized’ society, the death penalty is little more than barbarism.
  
  死刑是个很情绪的问题,很多人的态度是,为了制止犯罪并且给罪犯应得的报应,死刑应该被经常并且迅速的执行。而另一些人相信在现代的,称之为“文明的”社会中,死刑有点太野蛮了。
  
  我的问题(…..be used both often and swiftly in……这里为什么用both? 是为了起强调的作用吗?去掉both可以吗?
  
  The main reason usually given in support of the death penalty is that it deters crime. However, if we look at statistics from around the world the evidence is rather mixed. If we look at crime statistics from two of the countries which most frequently use the death penalty, China and the United State, we see that crime is more common per capita in the State than in Britain (which does not have then death penalty, except in times of war), but less common per person in China than in either Britain or the States. This is particularly true if we look at violent crime. Many Americans and non- Americans suggest the stricter gun control laws in the US would have a greater effect on reducing crime than the death penalty has.
  那些支持死刑的人们经常给出的主要理由是,死刑可以制止犯罪。然而,如果我们从世界范围中统计的证据却很混乱(rather mixed 我觉得翻译很混乱很不合适,应该是什么意思呢??)如果我们从两个经常用到死刑的国家中观察犯罪统计,中国和美国,我们发现美国的人均犯罪率高于英国(没有死刑,除了战时)。但是,中国的人均犯罪率比美国和英国都低。尤其在暴力犯罪方面更为属实。许多美国人和非美国人建议应该在美国法律中对枪支进行严格的控制,其减少犯罪的作用比死刑更大。
  
  我的问题:这是文章的第二段,应该是开始论证了,第一句话是说支持死刑的原因。从however开始到结尾都是讲,死刑未必是减少犯罪的有效办法。并且用中国美国和英国做为例子,但我总觉得例子不太切题,是我理解有问题吗?
  
  A second argument used to justify capital punishment is that the criminal deserves such extreme punishment as a result of committing particular crimes .Whilst everyone would probably agree that the punishment should be proportionate to the crime, many argue that the death penalty is often a reaction to crimes that have caught the public attention. This, they say, contradicts the concept of equal justice for all~
  
  第二种观点是证明死刑是一种极端行为的极端惩罚,但许多人认为,处以死刑,通常是对 那些引起了社会关注的罪行的 反应(结果)” [并非仅以罪行轻重而定],他们认为,这违反了人人生而平等的理念
  
  ----感谢outtowner和officebug
  
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  后半段文章晚些时候发上来.:)
  
  

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作者:ddm95 时间:2008-07-21 18:17:18
  貌似英文版就有点问题。当然,也有可能是我的水平问题。
  
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